Word choice - induced / resulting New sentence needed: Then the further... tense - rises / rose ... as the mid-1990s in the late 1990s .. after a year of being unchanged / of remaining stable In the table, focus more on the differences. "ApproximatelyUnder half of the junior respondents are satisfied with the office furniture while 1.5 timesmore than seven out of tenthe number of senior respondents are contented." There is no need for sub-headings such as 'reason' and 'implication'. Write together in one paragraph. Hong Kong
In mid-1990s, profits made by Mojo in Hong Kong increased steadily for a few years because of the economic prosperity by high development in financial sector. However, After the handover of sovereignty in 1997, profits dropped dramatically in a year due to the financial crisis and induced huge reduction in consumption expenses, then the further decrease became moderate in the next year may be because of the . After that. profits rises steadily at the same rate as mid-1990s in late 1990s.
Singapore
Profits made by Mojo in Singapore increased in mid-1990s. Then dropped steadily after a year of unchange.
Office furniture
Approximately half of the junior respondents are satisfied with the office furniture while 1.5 times the number of senior respondents are contented.
reason :
It may probably because the junior respondents have more usage are more concern about quality
Word choice - induced / resulting
New sentence needed: Then the further...
tense - rises / rose
... as the mid-1990s in the late 1990s
.. after a year of being unchanged / of remaining stable
In the table, focus more on the differences.
"Approximately Under half of the junior respondents are satisfied with the office furniture while 1.5 times more than seven out of ten the number of senior respondents are contented."
There is no need for sub-headings such as 'reason' and 'implication'. Write together in one paragraph.
Hong Kong
In mid-1990s, profits made by Mojo in Hong Kong increased steadily for a few years because of the economic prosperity by high development in financial sector. However, After the handover of sovereignty in 1997, profits dropped dramatically in a year due to the financial crisis and induced huge reduction in consumption expenses, then the further decrease became moderate in the next year may be because of the . After that. profits rises steadily at the same rate as mid-1990s in late 1990s.
Singapore
Profits made by Mojo in Singapore increased in mid-1990s. Then dropped steadily after a year of unchange.
Office furniture
Approximately half of the junior respondents are satisfied with the office furniture while 1.5 times the number of senior respondents are contented.
reason :
It may probably because the junior respondents have more usage are more concern about quality
implication